Day 13: This post is written as part of the novella, 'An Orkut Love Story: Chapter 13' for the Ultimate Blog Challenge for July 2014.
Chapter 13:
“So you think you can win my heart by sending Paulo Coelho’s
quotes?” Swagata asks.
“Hmm! When someone has already given me her pink shaped
heart, I’ll just sit and hold her heart in my hand,” I flirt.
“Yuck!!!! Pink shaped heart, that’s so cheesy, dude, think
of a better line. Be more creative with your kiddish pick-up lines, One, Four,
Three and all,” She sounds horrified.
“Waise bhi! Someone sent me ‘Brida’ all the way from Hong
Kong. What do I make of it?” I quiz her.
She tries to change the conversation, “Ok, enough of quotes.
I am demanding a creative and romantic proposal that will charm me.”
I try to act funny, “Girls are made that way only. What??? You
expect me to ask you on phone?”
“Yeah, you better do that.”
“Hmm. There is a cute girl whose picture I once saw on Orkut
and she tormented me to death, feeling there is a connection between us. I
happily hummed mushy songs by the beach and on the highways. People thought I
escaped from the mental asylum. Every day, she walks into my dreams to give me
sleepless night, coyly whispers sweet nothings in my ears. I realize it’s not a
dream when she makes cute faces on scraps, playing crush games, teases and
seduces me on phone. I am longing to hold her in my arms, cuddling and kissing
her. Please tell her how much I feel for her.”
“Not bad, Mr Karan. I’ll see if I have time to tell her. You
are going a bit too fast on phone, cuddling, kissing and all. She hopes that you
will be as brave and daring when they meet in Amchi Mumbai.”
“So, she wanna puts me to test?”
“I think she will and already has..to make you propose her
in front of every ne. That’s your punishment for coming up with lame pick-up
lines, On, Four, Three.”
“Kiss her lips for me.”
“Naughty boy.”
Swagata smooches the phone.
“Happy?”
“I want more…I am getting wild right now.”
“Go to hell.”
She hangs up.
4 comments:
It takes a lot--a lot--of practice before you become a good writer. You could join a writer's group to give you some pointers. Try the Internet Writers Workshop. I highly recommend the novels section.
Will have to go back and read the whole story.
@Francene: Thanks for your honest inputs. Please do point out at some of the loopholes so that I can work on it. Have a good day:)
Thanks Suzy for dropping in.No hurry and take ur time:)
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